lol yo i love this. specially the
"Does God love us?
Don’t really know, don’t really care.
We have love enough for everything:"
part. i feel the same.

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"A Man Who Has Nothing He Is Willing To Die For; Is Not Fit To Live" - MLK Jr.
One who takes the art of war as his profession cannot consciously be good, so help me embrace another art in pursuit of grace.

interesting.... another read will likely be required... good job!

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exterminate the hated, vanquish the conquered, torture the forsaken, and forsake the tortured

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i'm not a failure but i know what it's like...--slipknot

Seems like a step in the right direction, the free verse sounds less contrived, I prefer it to your others.

I supose coming from you thats high praise, i feel the same thanks

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I'm all out of profound utterings. Damn.

Thanks its nice to know i'm not the only one.

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I'm all out of profound utterings. Damn.

Go ahead, just clocking up page views. ^o^

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I'm all out of profound utterings. Damn.

nice one, i think you shoudl try some more free veruse, it lets you go wild! keep it up!

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keep smiling, hide the dark inside

i take issue with the bottom line of the signature... where would we be if there were no soldiers to serve for our benefit? is it impossible to have a virtuous warrior? i do not think that studying the art of war is a moral disqualifier, especially if used to conquer one's own mind. think of the monks of the Shao Lin...

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exterminate the hated, vanquish the conquered, torture the forsaken, and forsake the tortured

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i'm not a failure but i know what it's like...--slipknot

i'm reminded of that phase of youth best described as "10-foot tall and bullet-proof." (and i've been there myself) i will say that free-form poetry can be liberating to the poet; one can concentrate on the message, distill it and empower it. i will say, however, that a poem of tightly controlled, consistent meter and rhyme can also empower his work... ultimately, your style is up to you--you're in charge. my advice, let your style develop naturally as suits your skills and abilities; you don't necessarily have to tune everybody out to do so, but, in a simplified phrase, do what's best for you!

good work. i'm going to keep an eye on you and see what else you come out with in the future!
J

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exterminate the hated, vanquish the conquered, torture the forsaken, and forsake the tortured

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i'm not a failure but i know what it's like...--slipknot